The chart below shows the number of road accidents and fatalities per 1,000 motorbikes in four different Vietnamese cities during 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Examiner Notes

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City had the highest numbers for both accidents and deaths, while Da Nang had the lowest numbers in both categories.” — Correctly covers both variables and names the highest/lowest cities, meeting the basic overview requirement, in plainer wording than a term like "considerably higher rates".
• CC“The pattern for deaths was similar.” — A short, clear topic sentence signals that the second paragraph mirrors the first, giving basic but effective cohesion between the two body paragraphs.
• LR“Da Nang was the safest again, with only 2 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes.” — The adjective "safest" is used appropriately, but the sentence otherwise relies on plain reporting verbs ("had") repeated throughout rather than varied vocabulary.
• GRA“Ho Chi Minh City had 10 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes, more than any other city.” — An accurate comparison using "more than any other city", though built from short, mostly simple sentences rather than the embedded appositive and relative-clause structures used at higher bands.

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Examiner Notes

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City recorded noticeably higher rates than the other cities in both categories, whereas Da Nang consistently had the lowest figures for accidents and fatalities alike.” — A well-formed overview covering both variables with a contrastive "whereas", close to the 7.5 answer's structure but with slightly plainer vocabulary ("noticeably higher" rather than "considerably higher... compared to").
• LR“less than a third of Ho Chi Minh City's rate” — A precise fractional comparison that adds analytical value beyond the raw figures, a technique the 6.5 answer does not attempt.
• GRA“Da Nang once again proved the safest, recording only 2 fatalities per 1,000 motorbikes, five times lower than Ho Chi Minh City's figure.” — A participial phrase ("recording...") followed by a comparative noun phrase packs extra detail into one sentence, though it stops short of the appositive-plus-relative-clause structure the 7.5 answer builds.
• CC“A broadly similar pattern can be seen for fatalities.” — This topic sentence performs the same mirroring function as the 7.5 answer's "A similar pattern emerged for fatalities", showing solid but slightly less crisp cohesion.

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Examiner Notes

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City registered considerably higher rates for both road accidents and fatalities compared to the other three cities, while Da Nang consistently recorded the lowest figures in both categories.” — An overview that covers both variables (accidents and fatalities) at once, identifying the highest and lowest cities without listing raw numbers.
• LR“This indicates a substantial disparity in road safety among the cities examined.” — The phrase "substantial disparity" is a precise, formal collocation for summarising a data gap, avoiding repetitive vocabulary.
• GRA“Ho Chi Minh City stood out with 84 incidents per 1,000 motorbikes, a figure significantly exceeding that of Hanoi, which recorded 65 accidents.” — A noun-phrase appositive ("a figure significantly exceeding...") followed by a relative clause packs a comparison into a single complex sentence.
• CC“A similar pattern emerged for fatalities.” — A short, clear topic sentence that signals the paragraph will mirror the structure of the previous one, aiding overall cohesion.
• TR“Da Nang maintained its position as the safest city with only 2 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes, representing the lowest figure by a considerable margin” — Closes the fatality data with an accurate superlative claim, mirroring the earlier accident-rate paragraph for balanced reporting.