The account is told with simple, direct sentences and a single plain closing statement of pride ('I felt genuinely proud to be his niece'), typical of Band 6.5.
The family member I want to talk about is my uncle, who runs a small restaurant in Hue.
Last October, there was heavy flooding in Hue, and water came into his restaurant and damaged the furniture, the kitchen equipment, and a lot of food. He lost a lot of money in just one night, and many people thought he would need months before he could open again.
But my uncle didn't sit around feeling sorry for himself. He cleaned the whole place together with his wife and two workers for almost a week, bought some cheaper second-hand tables from another shop that was closing down, and reopened in less than three weeks, with a slightly smaller menu than before.
I felt very proud because he didn't give up, even after losing so much in one night. He kept saying the restaurant was his family's whole life, so stopping was never really an option for him. When I visited later and saw customers eating and laughing there again, I felt genuinely proud to be his niece.
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Why this band
- LR“He lost a lot of money in just one night” — 'A lot of money' is a vague, high-frequency quantity phrase rather than a specific figure or a more vivid description of the loss (soaked stock, ruined equipment), and it relies on the reader's general sense of scale rather than painting the scene. That reliance on common, general vocabulary instead of precise or descriptive detail is exactly what keeps this sentence at Band 6.5 rather than the more specific phrasing a 7.0 or 7.5 answer would use to make the loss feel concrete.
- GRA“But my uncle didn't sit around feeling sorry for himself.” — This is a short, single-clause sentence built around a common informal idiom, 'sit around feeling sorry for himself', which is used correctly and adds some colour, but the sentence itself has no subordination or coordination — it simply states one fact and stops. A 7.0 answer would more likely attach a further clause to it (e.g. 'he didn't sit around feeling sorry for himself, but got straight to cleaning up'), so despite the informal flavour of the vocabulary, the grammar here stays within Band 6.5's plain, single-clause range.
- FC“I felt genuinely proud to be his niece.” — 'Genuinely proud to be his niece' is a direct, unhedged statement of feeling that closes the story, but it doesn't unpack what specifically about the uncle's response — the refusal to give up, the family loyalty — produced that pride. Stating an emotion plainly and moving on, rather than analysing it, is the minimal-elaboration pattern typical of Band 6.5 fluency and coherence.