The answer uses plain, direct description of the problem and result ('My shoulders don't hurt as much anymore, and I feel calmer during the day, especially before meetings'), staying clear but linguistically simple, as typical of Band 6.5.
The change I want to talk about is that I started doing yoga three mornings a week. I began this about four months ago, in May.
Before that, I always felt stiff and tired after sitting at my desk all day designing apps. My neck and shoulders hurt a lot, and I didn't sleep very well either. I decided something had to change, so I started looking for a solution.
My colleague Linh was the one who actually helped me. She has been doing yoga for years, and she told me about a small studio in Vincom mall, not far from my office. She took me to my first class and showed me some basic poses so I wouldn't feel embarrassed in front of everyone else. Now I go by myself most weeks, but sometimes she still joins me.
This change has been very positive for me. My shoulders don't hurt as much anymore, and I feel calmer during the day, especially before meetings. I also sleep better at night now. It's a small change, but it has made a real difference to how I feel every day, and I'm glad Linh pushed me to try it.
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Why this band
- FC“Before that, I always felt stiff and tired after sitting at my desk all day designing apps.” — This sentence opens the "before" section of the narrative with a straightforward statement of physical discomfort, using the time marker "before that" to signal the timeline shift without any more sophisticated discourse marker. The two adjectives "stiff and tired" name the problem plainly rather than building toward it with an anecdote or example, consistent with the one-reason, direct-answer pattern the descriptor associates with Band 6.5 fluency. A stronger answer might instead open this section with a specific moment ("there was one evening when...") rather than a general statement of how things used to feel.
- LR“My shoulders don't hurt as much anymore, and I feel calmer during the day” — The vocabulary here — "hurt," "calmer," "during the day" — is entirely common, high-frequency wording with no attempt at a more specific or medical-sounding alternative like "less tense" or "more centred," exactly the ceiling the Band 6.5 descriptor sets for lexical resource. The comparative "as much anymore" is a simple, functional way to mark improvement over time rather than a more precise degree expression. Reporting two separate results side by side with "and" also keeps the sentence additive rather than integrated, reinforcing the plain, list-like quality typical of this band.
- GRA“It's a small change, but it has made a real difference to how I feel every day” — The sentence uses "but" to set up a simple size-versus-impact contrast ("small change" vs. "real difference"), an accurate and natural way to close the story but one that relies on coordination rather than subordination. A Band 7.0 or higher version might nest the second clause inside a more complex frame ("even though it's a small change, it's made...") or use a cleft structure to emphasise the outcome. Here, the noun phrase "how I feel every day" functions as the object of "difference to," a small but useful piece of grammatical control within an otherwise simple sentence.