A simple listed sequence of actions and a plain closing reason ('because I don't have that kind of patience myself') keep the narrative clear but grammatically basic, Band 6.5 level.
The person I want to talk about is my younger sister, Thảo, who lives in Ho Chi Minh City. Of course I know her very well, since she's my only sibling and we talk on Zalo almost every day.
What she learned, without any teacher, was how to bake cakes and bread. About two years ago, she started watching baking videos online during her free time, just for fun at first. She learned things like how to make simple sponge cakes, cookies, and later more difficult things like croissants.
She taught herself completely from videos and online recipes. She would watch a video several times, write down the steps in a small notebook, and then try it in her kitchen. Many times the cake didn't rise, or it was burnt, but she just tried again the next weekend.
How easy it was for her, I would say, was not easy at all in the beginning. She had no special equipment, and her first oven was quite old and cooked unevenly. But because she really enjoyed it, she didn't give up. After about a year, her cakes became really good, and now she even sells small cakes to her friends and coworkers. I think that's impressive, because I don't have that kind of patience myself.
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Why this band
- GRA“She would watch a video several times, write down the steps in a small notebook, and then try it in her kitchen.” — Three actions are joined in a simple list using commas and 'and', all sharing the same subject and modal 'would' (marking habitual past action), with no subordination or variation in how each item is introduced. This is a correct and clear way to narrate a repeated routine, but it treats all three steps as grammatically equal rather than showing how one step led causally into the next — the kind of connective reasoning a 7.0 answer might add. It matches the 6.5 grammar descriptor's expectation of simple sentences that stay accurate rather than reaching for structural variety.
- FC“I think that's impressive, because I don't have that kind of patience myself.” — The closing sentence states an opinion ('impressive') and attaches exactly one supporting reason (lack of personal patience) via a single 'because' clause, ending the answer there rather than extending into a broader reflection on what the sister's persistence might mean more generally. It's a complete, on-topic close that directly answers the implicit prompt, but the self-comparison stays at face value rather than being developed into insight, which is the ceiling the 6.5 Fluency & Coherence descriptor sets — one clear reason is enough.
- LR“Many times the cake didn't rise, or it was burnt” — 'Didn't rise' and 'was burnt' are the two most basic, literal ways to describe baking failure, chosen over more specific or varied alternatives (collapsed, over-baked, dense) a higher-band answer discussing the same topic might use. The fronted adverbial 'Many times' at the start is itself a simple, common way to signal repetition rather than a more elaborate frequency expression. Together these keep the description of the sister's early failures completely clear and easy to follow, which is exactly what the 6.5 lexical target rewards.