The answer uses plain, direct language ('he decided to make some changes') and simple sentence patterns, giving a clear but modest account typical of Band 6.5.
The person who comes to mind is my father, who lives in Hue. About two years ago, he went for a routine health check and the doctor told him his blood pressure was too high, which really worried him and the rest of our family.
After that, he decided to make some changes. He started playing badminton with his old friends early in the morning, three or four times a week, at a court near our house. He also tried to walk more instead of always using his motorbike for short trips. My mother helped him by cooking less salty food and cutting down on fried dishes at home.
He wanted to improve his fitness mainly because he was scared of having a stroke or heart problems, since a few of his friends his age had already had health issues. It was not really about looking good, just about staying healthy for the family.
Now, whenever I visit Hue, I notice he looks more energetic, and his blood pressure has gone back to normal. I feel really proud of him, because I know it is not easy to change habits after so many years. He has become a good example for me, and now I try to exercise regularly too, so I do not have the same problems when I am older.
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Why this band
- LR“he decided to make some changes” — 'Make some changes' names the category of action (change happened) without specifying what kind, unlike a more precise phrase such as 'overhauled his routine' or 'cut back on salt', which a higher-band answer would likely reach for. This vagueness is not a mistake, since the specifics follow in the next sentences, but the phrase itself carries no descriptive weight on its own — which is the plain, high-frequency vocabulary Band 6.5 targets rather than penalises.
- GRA“He also tried to walk more instead of always using his motorbike for short trips.” — 'Instead of always using his motorbike for short trips' is a single prepositional phrase attached to a simple main clause, giving one comparison (walking vs. riding) without combining it with any other idea, such as a reason or a result. A Band 7.0 answer covering the same content would more likely fold a reason into the same sentence ('he started walking more, which also helped him lose weight'), so the accuracy here sits comfortably within 6.5's 'basic complex' range rather than pushing past it.
- FC“It was not really about looking good, just about staying healthy for the family.” — The negative-then-positive pattern ('not really about X, just about Y') states the father's motivation cleanly, but the sentence closes the point immediately rather than exploring what 'staying healthy for the family' actually meant to him or the rest of the household. That's the plain, direct development Band 6.5 fluency is built on — a clear point made once and left there, rather than expanded into the kind of reflective aside a 7.0 or 7.5 answer would add.