The chart below shows the number of road accidents and fatalities per 1,000 motorbikes in four different Vietnamese cities during 2023. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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考官点评

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City had the highest numbers for both accidents and deaths, while Da Nang had the lowest numbers in both categories.” — Correctly covers both variables and names the highest/lowest cities, meeting the basic overview requirement, in plainer wording than a term like "considerably higher rates".正确涵盖了两个变量并指出了最高/最低的城市，满足了总览句的基本要求，但措辞比 "considerably higher rates" 这类表达更为平实。
• CC“The pattern for deaths was similar.” — A short, clear topic sentence signals that the second paragraph mirrors the first, giving basic but effective cohesion between the two body paragraphs.简短清晰的主题句表明第二段与第一段结构相呼应，为两个正文段落提供了基础但有效的连贯性。
• LR“Da Nang was the safest again, with only 2 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes.” — The adjective "safest" is used appropriately, but the sentence otherwise relies on plain reporting verbs ("had") repeated throughout rather than varied vocabulary.形容词 "safest" 使用得当，但句子其余部分主要依赖反复使用的平实报告动词（"had"），而非多样化的词汇。
• GRA“Ho Chi Minh City had 10 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes, more than any other city.” — An accurate comparison using "more than any other city", though built from short, mostly simple sentences rather than the embedded appositive and relative-clause structures used at higher bands.使用 "more than any other city" 进行了准确的比较，但整体由短小、多为简单句的句子构成，而非高分答案中嵌入式的同位语和定语从句结构。

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考官点评

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City recorded noticeably higher rates than the other cities in both categories, whereas Da Nang consistently had the lowest figures for accidents and fatalities alike.” — A well-formed overview covering both variables with a contrastive "whereas", close to the 7.5 answer's structure but with slightly plainer vocabulary ("noticeably higher" rather than "considerably higher... compared to").结构完整的总览句，用转折词 "whereas" 同时涵盖了两个变量，结构上接近7.5分范文，但用词略显平实（用 "noticeably higher" 而非 "considerably higher... compared to"）。
• LR“less than a third of Ho Chi Minh City's rate” — A precise fractional comparison that adds analytical value beyond the raw figures, a technique the 6.5 answer does not attempt.精确的分数比较，在原始数字之外增加了分析价值，这是6.5分范文未曾尝试的手法。
• GRA“Da Nang once again proved the safest, recording only 2 fatalities per 1,000 motorbikes, five times lower than Ho Chi Minh City's figure.” — A participial phrase ("recording...") followed by a comparative noun phrase packs extra detail into one sentence, though it stops short of the appositive-plus-relative-clause structure the 7.5 answer builds.分词短语（"recording..."）后接比较性名词短语，在一句话中容纳了更多细节，但仍未达到7.5分范文所构建的同位语加定语从句的结构复杂度。
• CC“A broadly similar pattern can be seen for fatalities.” — This topic sentence performs the same mirroring function as the 7.5 answer's "A similar pattern emerged for fatalities", showing solid but slightly less crisp cohesion.该主题句与7.5分范文的 "A similar pattern emerged for fatalities" 发挥了相同的呼应作用，展示了扎实但略欠简练的连贯性。

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考官点评

• TR“Overall, Ho Chi Minh City registered considerably higher rates for both road accidents and fatalities compared to the other three cities, while Da Nang consistently recorded the lowest figures in both categories.” — An overview that covers both variables (accidents and fatalities) at once, identifying the highest and lowest cities without listing raw numbers.总览句同时涵盖了两个变量（事故和死亡人数），指出最高和最低的城市，而未罗列具体数字。
• LR“This indicates a substantial disparity in road safety among the cities examined.” — The phrase "substantial disparity" is a precise, formal collocation for summarising a data gap, avoiding repetitive vocabulary."substantial disparity" 是概括数据差距时精准、正式的搭配，避免了词汇重复。
• GRA“Ho Chi Minh City stood out with 84 incidents per 1,000 motorbikes, a figure significantly exceeding that of Hanoi, which recorded 65 accidents.” — A noun-phrase appositive ("a figure significantly exceeding...") followed by a relative clause packs a comparison into a single complex sentence.名词短语同位语（"a figure significantly exceeding..."）后接定语从句，将比较关系压缩进一个复合句中。
• CC“A similar pattern emerged for fatalities.” — A short, clear topic sentence that signals the paragraph will mirror the structure of the previous one, aiding overall cohesion.简短清晰的主题句，表明本段将与前一段的结构相呼应，增强了整体连贯性。
• TR“Da Nang maintained its position as the safest city with only 2 deaths per 1,000 motorbikes, representing the lowest figure by a considerable margin” — Closes the fatality data with an accurate superlative claim, mirroring the earlier accident-rate paragraph for balanced reporting.以准确的最高级表述收束死亡数据，与前面事故率段落呼应，实现了均衡的报告。