The plot is narrated in short, plain sentences with a single, directly stated lesson at the end ('being too greedy brings trouble'), typical of Band 6.5.情节用简短朴实的句子讲述,结尾直接点出一个道理('太贪心会招惹麻烦'),是6.5分的典型特征。
The story I want to talk about is called Cây Khế, or The Star Fruit Tree. I know it because my grandmother told it to me many times when I was small, in Hue, usually just before bed.
The main animal in the story is a giant bird, a magic one that can talk and fly very far across the sea.
The story is about two brothers. The older brother is greedy and keeps almost all of their parents' land, leaving the younger brother only a small house and one star fruit tree. Every year, the giant bird comes and eats the fruit from that tree. One day, the bird tells the younger brother it will carry him to an island full of gold, if he sews a small bag first. He goes, takes only a little gold, and comes home rich but still kind. When the older brother hears about this, he makes a huge bag for himself, but he is too greedy, and he falls into the sea on the way back.
I like this story because it teaches a simple lesson, that being too greedy brings trouble in the end. It's also a story my grandmother loved telling, so it always makes me think of her.
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我想说的故事叫《杨桃树》(Cây Khế)。我知道这个故事是因为小时候在顺化，奶奶经常讲给我听，通常是在睡觉前讲的。
故事里主要的动物是一只巨大的鸟，一只会说话、能飞很远、飞过大海的神鸟。
故事讲的是两兄弟。哥哥很贪心，几乎占了父母留下的所有土地，只给弟弟留了一间小房子和一棵杨桃树。每年，那只巨鸟都会飞来吃树上的果子。有一天，鸟告诉弟弟，如果他缝一个小口袋，鸟就会带他去一个满是黄金的岛。弟弟去了，只拿了一点点金子，回来后虽然富有了，却依然善良。哥哥听说以后，给自己缝了一个巨大的口袋，但因为太贪心，回来的路上从鸟背上掉进了大海。
我喜欢这个故事，因为它讲了一个很简单的道理：太贪心最后会带来麻烦。这也是奶奶最喜欢讲的故事之一，所以每次听到它，我都会想起她。
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- LR“a giant bird, a magic one that can talk and fly very far across the sea” — This description relies on simple, high-frequency words — "giant," "magic," "talk," "fly," "far" — building a clear picture without reaching for any more specific or literary vocabulary. It communicates the fantastical element of the folk tale plainly and accurately, which is all 6.5 requires, though a 7.0 answer might use a more specific verb than "fly very far," such as "soar across the ocean." The plainness suits the register of a story being retold from childhood memory rather than analyzed academically.这段描述依靠的是简单、高频的词汇——"giant"、"magic"、"talk"、"fly"、"far"——勾勒出一幅清晰的画面,而没有去够更具体或更文学化的词汇。它平实而准确地传达了这个民间故事的奇幻元素,这正是Band 6.5所要求的全部,尽管Band 7.0的答案可能会用比"fly very far"更具体的动词,比如"soar across the ocean"。这种朴素也符合这个故事的语域——它是从童年记忆中被重新讲述出来的,而不是被学术性地分析。
- GRA“One day, the bird tells the younger brother it will carry him to an island full of gold, if he sews a small bag first.” — This is a basic conditional sentence, with the if-clause placed after the main clause rather than before it, correctly linking the reward, gold, to the condition, sewing a small bag first, as the original tale requires. It's accurate and functional, but it's the only piece of grammatical machinery in the sentence, matching the mostly-simple profile of 6.5 rather than combining the conditional with any additional subordination. It also faithfully reproduces a key plot mechanism from the folk tale, which the story's moral later depends on.这是一个基本的条件句,if从句被放在主句之后而不是之前,准确地把奖赏——黄金——与条件——先缝一个小布袋——联系起来,正如原故事所要求的那样。这句话准确且有效,但它是整句话里唯一的语法机关,符合Band 6.5以简单句为主的特点,而不是把条件句与任何其他从属结构结合起来。它也忠实再现了这个民间故事中一个关键的情节机制,这个故事后面的寓意正是建立在这一点之上。
- FC“I like this story because it teaches a simple lesson, that being too greedy brings trouble in the end.” — This gives one directly stated reason for liking the story, its simple moral, without further elaboration on how that lesson applies to the speaker's own life or a more personal reflection. At 6.5, one clear reason delivered plainly is enough to close the answer coherently; a 7.5 answer would likely add a more specific or reflective observation about the moral's relevance. It matches the folk-tale register of the story itself, which is built around a clear, traditional lesson rather than ambiguity.这句话给出了一个直接陈述的、喜欢这个故事的理由——它简单的寓意——而没有进一步阐述这个道理如何应用到说话人自己的生活中,也没有更个人化的反思。在Band 6.5水平上,清楚明白地给出一个理由就足以让答案连贯收尾;Band 7.5的答案很可能会加上一个更具体或更反思性的观点,谈谈这个寓意的现实意义。它也符合这个故事本身的民间传说语域,这个故事正是围绕一个清晰、传统的教训而非模糊性来构建的。